Globox Simpson's Crazy Adventures!

Globox Simpson · Posted: Tue Dec 29, 2009 10:37 am

This is an adventure story set in BTC. If you want to be a character in it,pm me. Chapter 1:Globox Simpson,Assasin.
The sun was shining over BTC,people were playing quizaboom and reading comics. In the Violet district Globox Simpson was sleeping. Nobody knew it,but he was an assasin for hire. He had killed countless noobs and a few non-noobs. As he woke up in his red wooden bed and looked out the window he thought:"I wonder what will happen today." He got his answer just five minutes after that,somebody called him and said "Hello,Globox? Can you kill this noob for me? He is in the bar." "Yes",Globox answered. Globox got dressed,took his assasin robe ,jumped out the window, landed on a roof, and rushed down behind the bar. If he had calculated right, the noob would be bartender,so he sat off the burglar alarm and when the noob came out,Globox shot him in the head atleast five times. "Job well done",Globox said. Then somebody called "Hello,I have your biggest mission yet here..." Do YOU want to be the employer or any other character? PM me!

Funny Lebowski · Posted: Tue Dec 29, 2009 10:42 am

Can I just say...

1) It's spelt "Assassin".
2) You didn't describe any of the scenes in all of that. I had no picture in my mind.
3) Normally an assassin gets a description of the person he/she needs to kill, then gets given a motive for the kill. Then a sum of money is offered and off the assassin goes. From my understanding, you did it without knowing what on earth the target looked like, had no motive at all AND did it all for free!
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Globox Simpson · Posted: Tue Dec 29, 2009 10:43 am

Sorry,sorry. I'll make it up in the next chapter,with a little twist.

Captin Simpson · Posted: Tue Dec 29, 2009 11:47 am

Funny Lebowski · Posted: Tue Dec 29, 2009 11:51 am

Well, it's really the required information to actually do some sort of assassin job.
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Funny Lebowski · Posted: Tue Dec 29, 2009 1:48 pm

I guess, but in the story he's not. Someone asked him to do it.
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Pancake Smith · Joined: 05 Aug 2008 Posts: 3110 Location: America

I think you need to think more about the story and its structure before we even delve into the problems in the writing itself.
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Sobchak Lebowski · Posted: Tue Dec 29, 2009 9:18 pm

An assassin for hire should need no motives for a job besides money, in order to keep things on a strictly professional level. For all we know, he could be getting a monthly paycheck.

I'd like to be Dr. Turnip, weapons salesman.
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Stuart Lebowski · Posted: Wed Dec 30, 2009 2:57 am

Globox Simpson · Posted: Wed Dec 30, 2009 8:21 am

Chapter 2:Globox's biggest assignment
Continued from last chapter...
"Hello?",Globox said. "Meet me behind the bank at 11.00 pm",The voice said. At that moment Globox's black WPhone called. He answered. "I forgot to tell you what noob I meant",his former employer said. "You mean I killed an innocent guy?"Globox asked. "Yes,he is banned now. Dispose(NOTE:Is this right?) the body of the guy you killed,you'll get 1000 creds for it",The employer said. Globox took the body,opened a manhole in the backyard of the bar,took the silver trashcan next to the backdoor and placed it on the lid of the manhole when he had throwed down the body. Globox rushed out the street,turned to the newspaper stand,turned left and ran into a weapons store. It really was a weapons store,there was guns on the walls,knives on shelves and ammo everywhere. Behind the counter there was a person all dressed in black. "Hello",he said. "Aren't you Sobchak?" Globox asked. "No,when I run this store I'm Dr.Turnip",Sobchak/Dr.Turnip said. "I want some bullets for this machine gun,also for this sniper and some throwing knives",Globox said. "Here you go",Dr.Turnip said. Globox paid the money,and went home. At 11 pm,he went to the back of the bank. A hooded figure said "Hello,your mission is to assassinate the Warbears." To be countinued...

Funny Lebowski · Posted: Wed Dec 30, 2009 8:27 am

http://img689.imageshack.us/img689/4568/shockedbear.png

Not the Warbears! Surprised

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Nickyh Smith · Joined: 12 Dec 2007 Posts: 933 Location: Taiwan

Love the adventure!

I'd like to be detective Alan, someone trying to track down Globox. Dunno if he should be strong or weak though.
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Globox Simpson · Posted: Wed Dec 30, 2009 10:14 am

Actually you are supposed to be your citizen,but okay.

Nickyh Smith · Joined: 12 Dec 2007 Posts: 933 Location: Taiwan